05.10.23
This was diverting enough but it could have done with another draft to make the relentlessly unsympathetic anti-hero(ine)'s motivations less muddled, to cut the dull details and weird cultural observations, to streamline the plot, to focus the humour and to sharpen the characters. (And another copy edit to get rid of the irritating comma splices; also distracting in Cat Lady - is this a thing now?) I think at the end you were supposed to shout 'The injustice!' but frankly she had it coming.
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